tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7388872630002307538.post5640965486699496788..comments2023-05-27T06:01:24.982-07:00Comments on APUSH5: #2 What role did religion play in the establishment of the English colonies in North America?minicooperhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09903525343324562903noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7388872630002307538.post-63755312450726098432007-09-16T19:11:00.000-07:002007-09-16T19:11:00.000-07:00C,Pretty good essay, better than most but there we...C,<BR/><BR/>Pretty good essay, better than most but there were a couple of things I was hoping you'd do better with. First is the the last sentence in the opening paragraph-"Nonetheless..." It's a distracts from the thesis, and it's not necessary. Secondly and more importantly, even though I asked for 5 paragraphs, it would have been better to elaborate regarding the role of religion in each of the colonies you mentioned. One of your classmates wrote too much about the specific colonies. Yours was not the opposite but you could have said more.<BR/>5 paragraphs is the average (for average writers!) You are not an average writer. :)<BR/><BR/>B<BR/><BR/>MBMr. Brushhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08859037190845665043noreply@blogger.com